Проверьте пожалуйста моё эссе, которое я писала на егэ. Пунктуацию, орфографию и т.д. я оставила прежними. Завтра апелляция и нужно знать, на что

Forever Young?
We can stay young forever. Dr Shen Ziyin, the Chinese doctor, says that he (1) … the answer to the problem of ageing. His idea is a herbal medicine to slow the process of ageing.
Dr Shen Ziyin (2) …Western medicine and at the same time he has the knowledge of traditional Chinese medicine. And, he (3) … for the past forty years to put together the best of both and find a cure for ageing. He has taken the idea from the ancient Chinese medicine system (4) … ‘shen’.
According to Shen, it is the kidney which (5)… the functioning of the body and its ageing process.
Dr Shen Ziyin studies show that herbal medicines based on the ‘shen’ system (6) … the ageing process.
What is ‘ageing’? It is the beginning of a stage where the body starts losing its ability to fight disease and infections. When people grow old, they have no strength; they lose hair, have backache and weakness is general, their skin wrinkles. This (7) … because when people grow old, their bodies produce T-cells. These T-cells include a particular material called Fas. Fas makes the cells in the body (8) … themselves.
So the only way (9) … down ageing is to slow the production of T-cells in the body. This can happen if people eat low calorie food. Then the body is not active enough (10) … extra T-cells. But, is going hungry all the time a good price to pay for (11) … young?
This is where Dr Shen’s herbal medicine comes in. But how effective it will be, only time can tell.

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5 1) regulate 3) regulates
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6 1) functioning 3) function
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7 1) happen 3) is happening
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9 1) to slow 3) slows
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10 1) producing 3) produced
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I very love summer because in summer long holidays and don’t should to go to school and that’s why have much free time. When the summer starts I get lots of free time to spend with my friends and my family. This summer was very interesting. My parents and I went to the Kolyvan' for recreation. The air there is always fresh and clean compared to the city polluted air. Weather and nature in this country were beautiful. We swam a lot in the White Lake, we sunbathed, we also went on many excursions, even twice climbed the blue mount (1,210 m) is the highest point of the ridge Kolyvansky and we also found of new friends there. I can say that Kolyvan' is one of the most fascinating places I’ve ever been to. The scenery is nice and there are many interesting historic monuments. And I'm happy that I have traveled a lot and I hope that my first journey wasn't the last one.



Я очень люблю лето, потому что летом длинные праздники и не должны ходить в школу, и именно поэтому имеют много свободного времени. Когда начинается лето я получаю много свободного времени, чтобы провести с моими друзьями и моей семьи. Это лето было очень интересно. Мои родители и я пошел в Колывань для отдыха. Воздух здесь всегда свежий и чистый по сравнению с городом загрязненного воздуха. Погода и природа в этой стране были красивыми. Мы плавали много в Белом озере, мы загорали, мы также пошли на многие экскурсии, даже два раза поднялись синие горы (1210 м) является самой высокой точкой хребта Колыванского и мы также нашли новых друзей. Могу сказать, что Колывань является одним из самых интересных мест, которые я когда-либо был. Пейзаж хорош и есть много интересных исторических памятников. И я счастлив, что я путешествовал много, и я надеюсь, что моя первая поездка не была последней.